tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1283987261815273280.post3827824183644152938..comments2024-03-10T12:09:50.303-05:00Comments on UNDER THE TIKI HUT : I'm Hearing Voices - Dialogue IntroductionCarol Kilgorehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15168273312704732896noreply@blogger.comBlogger50125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1283987261815273280.post-33813560604268115592012-02-10T09:46:58.887-06:002012-02-10T09:46:58.887-06:00Julie - Ya think :)
Talli - Thanks!Julie - Ya think :)<br /><br />Talli - Thanks!Carol Kilgorehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03745686632918324803noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1283987261815273280.post-45471048103698361092012-02-10T06:47:25.974-06:002012-02-10T06:47:25.974-06:00Love the dialogue here - I can get a clear sense o...Love the dialogue here - I can get a clear sense of their personalities.Talli Rolandhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04780882465745107715noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1283987261815273280.post-91805393817369243292012-02-10T02:40:31.568-06:002012-02-10T02:40:31.568-06:00I also think it's very clever that Charlie and...I also think it's very clever that Charlie and Summer don't see each other at the beginning. I have a feeling that Live-in Handyman was your technical advisor. I enjoyed the realistic dialogue that really sold the scene. JulieEmpty Nest Insiderhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10074223969046687064noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1283987261815273280.post-16908697947306980432012-02-09T23:01:25.412-06:002012-02-09T23:01:25.412-06:00Golden Eagle - Thanks!Golden Eagle - Thanks!Carol Kilgorehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03745686632918324803noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1283987261815273280.post-6853072553141823362012-02-09T19:30:32.511-06:002012-02-09T19:30:32.511-06:00I thought it flowed really well! :)I thought it flowed really well! :)Golden Eaglehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08721520451194318436noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1283987261815273280.post-54954014497866785462012-02-09T18:33:10.237-06:002012-02-09T18:33:10.237-06:00Clarissa - Yeah, good thing :)
JoLynne - Thanks.
...Clarissa - Yeah, good thing :)<br /><br />JoLynne - Thanks.<br /><br />Medeia - Great! I'm glad.Carol Kilgorehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03745686632918324803noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1283987261815273280.post-4427772071601854072012-02-09T17:32:33.850-06:002012-02-09T17:32:33.850-06:00I like how Charlie and Summer don't see each o...I like how Charlie and Summer don't see each other at first. I was drawn into the dialogue and could picture the scene.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1283987261815273280.post-72519476711570100572012-02-09T17:16:52.723-06:002012-02-09T17:16:52.723-06:00I like how this pure dialog communicates action.I like how this pure dialog communicates action.JoLynne Lyonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01029955836072785693noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1283987261815273280.post-63519412051738903952012-02-09T16:22:55.705-06:002012-02-09T16:22:55.705-06:00Your characters were making me hungry! I love Mexi...Your characters were making me hungry! I love Mexican food. Well, I better, I live here.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12160669603997465454noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1283987261815273280.post-71403641868372247552012-02-09T15:10:43.315-06:002012-02-09T15:10:43.315-06:00Shelly - Thanks. I'm all about easy :)
Lisa -...Shelly - Thanks. I'm all about easy :)<br /><br />Lisa - Thanks. Guacamole, anyone?Carol Kilgorehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03745686632918324803noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1283987261815273280.post-30753820966406305042012-02-09T14:09:26.337-06:002012-02-09T14:09:26.337-06:00Too hungry for Mexican food to think about your wr...Too hungry for Mexican food to think about your writing. (Just kidding. Nice job!)Lisahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16570627401151164420noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1283987261815273280.post-70906972075801356402012-02-09T13:58:18.775-06:002012-02-09T13:58:18.775-06:00Very natural. Very easy to read. Nice work!Very natural. Very easy to read. Nice work!Small Town Shelly Brownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13535247595352753415noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1283987261815273280.post-35703484354524342692012-02-09T13:52:59.708-06:002012-02-09T13:52:59.708-06:00Shirley - "Sparkly" :) Thank you.
Ciara...Shirley - "Sparkly" :) Thank you.<br /><br />Ciara - I'm glad.<br /><br />Jess - Thanks so much for reading and commenting!Carol Kilgorehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03745686632918324803noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1283987261815273280.post-21831071561516265912012-02-09T12:38:01.131-06:002012-02-09T12:38:01.131-06:00Oooo I really liked it! I could really picture eve...Oooo I really liked it! I could really picture everything even without the dialogue tags! Great job!Jesshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02000569858548717605noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1283987261815273280.post-87263093190146120072012-02-09T12:01:13.567-06:002012-02-09T12:01:13.567-06:00Great job! I could totally see the two interacting...Great job! I could totally see the two interacting.Ciarahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15628488753277495111noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1283987261815273280.post-63034349480301436102012-02-09T11:03:51.769-06:002012-02-09T11:03:51.769-06:00Great characters and wonderfully sparkly dialogue....Great characters and wonderfully sparkly dialogue. Love it!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05938431508430656253noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1283987261815273280.post-19934857742345295882012-02-09T08:44:39.273-06:002012-02-09T08:44:39.273-06:00Madeleine - Good catch. She should probably have s...Madeleine - Good catch. She should probably have said something like 'Don't rush on my account.'<br /><br />Jan - Thanks, Jan.<br /><br />Rula - Woo-hoo! I'll sneak over. Glad you enjoyed this.Carol Kilgorehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03745686632918324803noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1283987261815273280.post-18863277553386503522012-02-09T08:04:27.328-06:002012-02-09T08:04:27.328-06:00Love how naturally the dialogue flowed and set the...Love how naturally the dialogue flowed and set the scene. I do feel the characters. Well done! (BTW...you won a book at my blog :)Rula Sinarahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01703015110251843280noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1283987261815273280.post-48957288282384462732012-02-09T07:27:56.033-06:002012-02-09T07:27:56.033-06:00What a wonderful exercise and what good use you ma...What a wonderful exercise and what good use you made of it! good work...Jan Morrisonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01771180344305042855noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1283987261815273280.post-17393889302282641342012-02-09T05:57:08.580-06:002012-02-09T05:57:08.580-06:00I really loved this dialogue, it set the scene wel...I really loved this dialogue, it set the scene well without tages or extraneous description.<br />The only thing that jarred for me & I hope you don't mind me commenting that I wonder if a potential employee would presume to tell a prospective employer to "Take your time. Do it right."<br />Great piece, nonetheless.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1283987261815273280.post-78341113185222327642012-02-08T22:42:35.659-06:002012-02-08T22:42:35.659-06:00McKenzie - It's a part of Summer's story. ...McKenzie - It's a part of Summer's story. Stay tuned for details :)<br /><br />Trisha - I always crave Mexican food.<br /><br />Cynthia - Goodie! And thanks :)<br /><br />Kelley - Nice to meet you, too. And thank you for such kind words :)Carol Kilgorehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03745686632918324803noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1283987261815273280.post-66152411443577789472012-02-08T21:59:36.201-06:002012-02-08T21:59:36.201-06:00What great characters! Such effortless dialog! So ...What great characters! Such effortless dialog! So well done!<br /><br />*New Follower!* So nice to *meet* you!Kelley Lynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06373650788799372118noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1283987261815273280.post-6633618607803956522012-02-08T21:59:35.940-06:002012-02-08T21:59:35.940-06:00What great characters! Such effortless dialog! So ...What great characters! Such effortless dialog! So well done!<br /><br />*New Follower!* So nice to *meet* you!Kelley Lynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06373650788799372118noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1283987261815273280.post-21406909372638617552012-02-08T19:56:47.865-06:002012-02-08T19:56:47.865-06:00I like these characters already and I really like ...I like these characters already and I really like the way you had them get to know each other. And there's a sense of something more to come that I want to know about. : ) NIce job!Cynthia Chapman Willishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12408985785062180536noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1283987261815273280.post-72037178599145258722012-02-08T19:01:27.556-06:002012-02-08T19:01:27.556-06:00Nice dialogue, and now I want to eat Mexican food!...Nice dialogue, and now I want to eat Mexican food! heheTrishahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16927558937796802496noreply@blogger.com